Not a bad start! I’m noticing that, since this is a sequel, it’s important to put in enough information about the characters and the premise so readers that have not read the first book can follow along, and not so much where those who have get bored. Jim Butcher does that masterfully in every installment of the Dresden Files, so that’s the model I’m going after.
Eileen Maksym studied philosophy at Yale and theology at Boston College, and now uses both to write science fiction. Currently she is an academic nomad, following her astrophysicist husband around the world, two kids in tow. When not writing or kid wrangling, Eileen is a hopeless fangirl. She can be found on Twitter (@eileenmaksym) squeeing over her favorite shows, most of which involve famous detectives, dashing time travelers, and creatures that are never, ever referred to as zombies.
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